Wednesday, November 5, 2014

Jeff

                                                                                                             
                                                                     Jeff
                                                                       

Jeff is a guy that works a normal job and has no family and is not wealthy, but that was about to change. He went to work one day and he noticed the there was a person that he saw on the side of the road and that guy seemed very familiar. He seemed to look like his dad but that can’t be because his dad had died in a shooting when he was eighteen. He was devastated by the loss because he was closer to his father than anyone else. He did everything with him and he was depressed ever since he died. There was something about this guy that seemed to stick in his mind all day.
The next day he was at the same spot on the road. So after a week of seeing this guy, he finally went up to him, after he pulled over right by him. He walked up to him and was instantly shocked by what he saw; that “guy” he saw by the road was his father.  At first he was in utter disbelief by seeing his father. His dad immediately went up to him and hugged him. He stayed there and talked to him all day his dad said to not tell anyone that he was alive.
His dad was a car salesman but what he didn’t know is that ,the chain of shops was an undercover division of the F.B.I. . When he disappeared he was investigating a criminal mastermind on the top ten most wanted list. This guy was very under the radar and had people everywhere he was dangerous and if he wanted people gone he had it happed. His dad was very close to finding out where he has his base of operations, but he found out and put a hit on him and his dad was thought to be dead by this guy. There was one question that Jeff had and it was how did you escape and fake your death this long. He said it was because he always has his car souped up with the latest spy tech. So he had a day earlier he had a missile proof case put in his car and he activated it when he saw the rocket. Their first mistake was to make sure that he was dead but they didn’t so he waited, escaped and went into hiding. Jeff wanted so bad to have his dad come home, so that his family could live in peace or at least tell his mother or family that he is alive.
His dad all of the sudden went nuts and said to get out and go far away. Jeff soon noticed why, there were some cars that were coming they were big black SUV’s coming at high speeds. Jeff knew why they were here. He accidently turned on his dads tracker and he didn’t tell him. He knew that if he left it would be the real last time he would see his father. So then he acted on the time that they had to escape so he took his father and they went off the road at them but they didn’t notice that it was them because his dad was ducked in the seat. They went on a trip to the only other place that his father had found safe place that was left for them anywhere else for them. It was a while till they got there about two hours but his dad said that it was good because they had no trouble along the way. They ended up in Topeka, Kansas. His dad had a shop there, so when he got called on “trips” to anywhere out of town.
They got there and his dad pulled up a panel from the floor that no one could notice if they ransacked this place. Jeff was very shocked when his dad showed him his gun wall. There was every gun under the sun. They grabbed some and they headed out to the train station to be undercover and they weren’t, the guy had people every where and they were on the train and had to make an escape, but the guys pulled a gun on the train and opened fire on them. they quickly went to the other car where there were less people. They got in to a fist and gunfight and Jeff had dropped three guys before making the mistake of missing a punch and getting a left hook right to the chin. Jeff recovered quickly but he was hit right when he got up in the stomach. He got the wind knocked out of him. The guys while he was dazed had beat up his father and had him in their arms. Jeff soon realized that their plan was to take his father and leave him to die on the train. They took him while he was knocked out and he was thrown out the window and landed in the escape car for the kidnappers. Jeff tried to get to his father and stop them from leaving but they dodged his punches and they threw Jeff at the wall. Jeff was very dazed and while he was they guys had taken his dad and thrown him into their getaway car and they were escaping. They shot Jeff with a tranquilizer dart and he awoke with people around him and his dad gone without a trace again. He exited the train and took a train back to Topeka. Then he got an idea he was going to go to the secret shelter and he was going to gather a plan go get his dad back from the guy. He went to the computer that was in the room and looked at the files. He was very very shocked, he saw the files on the guy and that guy was his grandfather. Then he realized that would make perfect since his parents never talked about him and he has never met him. He was going to try to get his dad back from his grandpa. The only thing that he has on him is the fact that he is his grandson. The danger is if he doesn’t recognize him he could die on the spot and that was the risk he was willing to take to save his father.


6 comments:

  1. I really like how this story told a lot about how this kid would do anything to save his father.

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  2. I wonder what would happen if you main character would be a girl or women? my favorite part was when you put the suspense at the end.

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  3. I like your story, it tells how this kid and his father in the situation they were in. My favorite part was when Jeff hugged his father when he noticed it was his father. I love your story Ben!!!

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  4. My favorite part was when Jeff found out that his grandpa had captured his dad. I really enjoyed the story, and thought it was excellent.

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  5. I love your story. It was very well thought, and put together. My favorite part was, when he found out that his grandpa kidnaped his dad. It was a very funny plot changer.

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  6. I loved your story. I loved the end when he said it was a risk he was willing to take for his father. It really showed how much he cared about him, and how he was willing to save him even if that meant dying. His grandpa kidnapping his dad really made the story more interesting. This was a great story.

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