Wednesday, February 11, 2015

The Proposal

                                       The Proposal

Lindsey and Tim were like any other couple; they were middle class. Lindsey worked as an accountant, and Tim was a realtor. One day Tim didn’t come home when he was suppose to. Lindsey waited till midnight before going to bed, but she couldn’t quite sleep. There was many thoughts that were running through her mind. “Was he cheating on me?” She thought. Lindsey decided that she needed to go to sleep because she had to work tomorrow.
The next day, Tim had still not come home. Lindsey decided to check his office to see if he had fallen asleep at his desk. She got in her car and headed off to Tim’s office. When she got there, his assistant Margot asked,
“Hey, there you are Lindsey, I have to ask you a question.” Lindsey replied,
“Hey Margot, I have to ask you a question too.” Margot asked,
“Okay, have you seen Tim anywhere? He hasn’t come back since he left at 4:30 yesterday afternoon.” Lindsey said,
“I was going to ask you the same thing.” Margot replied,
“Well, that is weird. I haven’t seen him since yesterday.” Lindsey then said,
“Well, I guess we will just have to wait until he comes back because I have to go to work.” Margot said,
“Okay bye, hope you find him.” Lindsey then walked out of Tim’s office and got into her car. She had so many thoughts were going in and out of her mind but one just stuck there. “Is he cheating on me?” She shook it off and continued to drive. She finally made it to work and started up her computer.
When she got onto her email; she noticed an email from someone she didn’t know. She opened up the email and it said,
“If you want Tim back you will follow exactly what I say.” Lindsey just sat there not moving. She finally realized she needed to follow his instructions and get Tim back. She decided to email the person back and maybe she would get Tim back. She emailed him,
“What do I need to do to get Tim back?” They replied in under a minute,
“You need to go to your favorite dress store and buy the most expensive dress you can find.” Lindsey hurried out of her office as soon as she could. When she got into her car and thought.”
“Why would he want me to get the most expensive dress? She shook that thought off and raced down to Sally’s Boutique to get her dress.  She walked into the door of Sally’s Boutique and asked for the most expensive dress. The sales lady said unsurely,
“Okay, right this way ma’am.” Lindsey followed her to a glass case with the most beautiful dress she had ever seen. All she could say was,
“Wow!” The sales lady said,
“This dress is going to be $567.90. Do you want to try it on? This is a size three.” Lindsey replied,
“That is my size. I need to buy it now!” The sales lady tried to say,
“I would recommend tryi--.” Lindsey cut her off by saying,
“I need it now! Please check me out!” The sales lady didn’t say any more questions and led her to the cash register. She paid the bill and saw that she had an email from the guy that had kidnapped Tim. She opened the email and it said,
“You now need to go to your favorite jewelry store and buy a diamond necklace and diamond earrings.” Lindsey thought this was very weird but did it anyway. On her way to the jewelry store all she could think was Tim being held hostage. Did they hurt him? Were they going to hurt him? What had he done to deserve this? What she didn’t notice was that she had run a red light and a cop was on her trail.
She pulled over to the side of the road and waited for the cop to come up to her window. When he did he said,
“Ma’am do you know you just ran a red light?” Lindsey replied,
“Yes sir, sorry I was just caught up in thought and wasn’t watching.” The cop then replied,
“Well ma’am, you are putting people in great danger by not paying attention? I’m going to have to give you a ticket.”  Lindsey replied defeated,
“Okay sir.” After the cop gave her a ticket, she was off. She went to Bradley’s Jewelry. When she walked in she asked the sales lady,
“Where are your diamond necklaces and earrings?” The sales lady replied,
“They are over there in the corner. Holler at me if you need any help.” Lindsey said a quick thank you and walked over to the diamond necklaces and earrings. She picked out the first ones she saw and fast walked to the cash register. Once she was done with getting the necklace and earrings, she received another email that said,
‘You now need to meet us at a vacant building at 505 N. Spider St. in New York.’ She drove as fast as she could with out getting pulled over again. When she arrived at the vacant building there was a man in all black was waiting for her. He said,
“Hurry up, we don’t have all day for you to stare at me like I’m crazy.” Lindsey didn’t say anything and stepped into the building. She thought “Who would be this crazy to steal someone?” She was taken out of her thoughts by the guy saying,
“Did you bring the stuff?” She replied,
“Yes.” He then said,
“Change into them in the bathroom then come out.” Lindsey didn’t ask any questions and went into the bathroom. When she came out she saw Tim on one knee. He asked her,
“Lindsey Julienne Jensen, you have made me so happy for 5 years now and I want to know. Will you marry me?” Lindsey couldn’t think. Her mind was still trying to process what had just happen. She just looked at him for a while then said,
“Yes!” He picked her up and spun her around. The she asked,
“Why did you do all this just to propose to me?” he answered,
I wanted to make your proposal really special to show how much you mean to me.” All she could say was,
“I love you!”
“I love you too!” He replied.



  1. This PPOW was awesome. I loved it. One of the things that made it great was how you brought the proposal up through blackmailing. That was a great idea.

  2. That was one of my favorite PPOW's! It was very well written. I loved when he proposed. That was definitely my favorite part. I like your use of dialog. There wasn't too much or too little. It was really good!


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